Undoubtedly, families are one of the most essential parts of the society and children spend most of their time with them. As children grow up, they will be familiar with their extended families, such as grandfathers, grandmothers, uncles and aunts. Since these people have directly influences on the children, the relationship between relatives and children counts as an important issue in their life. In this case, many people want to know whether these relationships are more important than the past or not. Although a common idea is that extended families are less important than the past, I personally repudiate it. In what follows, I delve into couple of reasons to shed light on my response.
First and foremost, people are so busier than the past. Nowadays, people think about promoting in their career and work really hard to achieve it; they spend most of their time on work and whenever they want to relax, they prefer to share the free time with their close family, which means not enough free time to spend with extended families. For example, my father is working for a regular company, named Basir, which is not as compatible as other companies. Whenever we want to set a meeting with our extended families, he says us not to count on him, owing to the fact that he wants to promote in his career and should try hard for it.
Second reason for finding the importance of extended families less than the past is the development of technology. In the past, people should meet their relatives face-to-face, but as the technology improved, they can use lots of social applications to meet their extended families on the internet and have chat with them. By this method, people may think that they can be in touch with their relatives whenever they want; as a result, they do not pay enough attention to meet their relatives face-to-face and it decreases the importance of extended families. Based on a research, which has done by Statistic department of Shahid Beheshti University, roughly two-thirds of sample people used their mobile application to communicate with even their close families. It shows that people are less concern about meeting their relatives face-to-face.
To recapitulate, we can conclude that extended families are less important in compared to the past. This is because not only people are so busier than the past but also improved technology have some effects on this statement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'chatted'.
Suggestion: chatted
...ended families on the internet and have chat with them. By this method, people may t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, third, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97530864198 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67637692527 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486419753086 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0495182052 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.529411765 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8235294118 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182703665651 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806663759443 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663521510656 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131292635437 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045021944549 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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