Do you agree or disagree: young people should try many different kinds of jobs or career before they decide the long term career of their life.
In today’s society, young people are eager to find a job which can feed themselves. And nobody can neglect the importance of finding a descent job. While there is a growing segment of people who contend this idea that young people should take the chance to try different kinds of occupations. Personally, I agree with this idea, and in the following paragraph, the specific reasons will be elaborated.
Firstly, trying different kinds of job means that a young man can get a considerable amount of experience from working. Also, a variety of occupations broaden his horizon which allows him to have a significant understanding of his future job. For example, a friend of mine called Lasso had down many internships in all kinds of companies, he learned a lot about how the business runs and how departments cooperate. Finally, he came up with his new idea that he should start his own company no matter how small it was. Starting business on his own may seem arduous and challengeable but actually it suited him well. Now his has a big company that do financial analysis all thanks to the experience of trying all kinds of occupations.
Another vital point which should be taken into consideration is that more experience an individual gains, he has more accesses to the information which has benefit to his future career. That is to say, young people have more knowledge about what kinds of long-term jobs they will dig in. The information can be accessed through anywhere, anytime, thanks to modern information technology. According to a research, the rate of career contentment has a substantial drop in the last 2 decades due to choosing the jobs based on unpractical information. Therefore, this provides the legitimacy to demonstrate that more information acquired from varied jobs allows young people to make more accurate and reliable decisions.
On the other hand, taking a long-term job as an individual’s first career can also be risky. A man easily get uncomfortable from working because repeating same task is tedious, especially job only need monotonous actions rather than intelligent thinking.
In conclusion, it is judicious to say that juveniles can benefit a lot by working in different jobs. Not only they are more prepared to start a long-term job, but also they have the ability to make more wise decision and find their favorable jobs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05329949239 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9423381798 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55076142132 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7805597413 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.789473684 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7368421053 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281770244022 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810784470594 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668438425181 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146877470059 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311061548986 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.