Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
It goes without saying that in this sophisticated world where the technology growing so fast that it could hardly be believed, parents have played a prominent role in all societies. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that today parents have less influence on their children than in the past while others look at this issue through a different lens. From my vantage point, today young people tend to make their own decisions by themselves instead of depending on their parents' viewpoint. In the following paragraphs, I will illustrate the most outstanding reasons.
First and foremost, the technology growing so fast. Statistics show that in evert five years the amount of information would be doubled. By emerge of Internet, children have access to the ocean of source information which provides the most reliable and newest information for making their decisions. They have the opportunity to gain information from others' experience too. Moreover, they can interact with a vast variety of people all around the world in order to find out their required information from experts. In contrast, children did not access to such a huge information sources and parents were the only responsible person to solve their children problems. For example, when my father tells story about his childhood, it seems he always trusted on his family’s information for making decisions such as finding job, continuing his education and getting married.
Another subtle point that should be mentioned is that nowadays specialization penetrate through all aspect of daily life. Take finding job as an example, in the past, children continued their father's job without any hesitation. However, in such a complex world, there are many new job opportunities for children. Besides, the world observes a vast change in term of education system. Today, children should be well educated to be successful in their future life. By arrival of many new field study, parents are not able to help their children on deciding study field. To illustrate, I studied communications system as my major around four years ago. When I was deciding to choose my major, I asked my father to help me. But he was not familiar with the new arrival fields of study which forced me to find a better way to find the answer of my questions. Hence, I tried to contact many professors at our nearby universities and also talked to many experts about my interest job. After all, I chose my major by considering these gathered information.
In conclusion, parents always have influenced in their children, although nowadays their effects are less than in the past. this is my deep belief that growing technology and specialization in today's life lead parents to be less effective than before. It should be kept in mind that parents are the first teacher for children and children should never neglect their influence on their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, while, after all, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10947368421 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75029567788 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528421052632 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2582861036 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.08 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.56 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239858868765 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631160783961 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831779593318 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161353663775 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754899756078 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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