Nowadays, it is often claimed that children can make a right decision independently. They believe that technology has provided this opportunity to younger people accessing many information sources such as library, social media and so on; thus, children can pay their way without depending on their family. On the contrary to this popular belief there are still who subscribe the view that life is more and more complicated and it requires children to get help their parents in different areas such as in a decision process. They think children in the past could comparatively make their decision independently due to the fact that life issues weren’t as complicated as today are. However, I strongly agree with this statement that nowadays children are more independent than before. The following paragraphs will substantiate the most outstanding reasons.
First, one should take into account this significant fact that, internet has facilitated accessing to a large number of information resources. People, especially children, can get a lot of material which can help them to make a right decision. There are a bunch of movies and text on the net and children only need to connect the net and take the advantages of these contents. The result of a study conducted in our country indicates that most of the time children can get more valuable information on the net than their received from their parents. This shows that children are more able to make a decision than before, when the net was less access.
In approaching this issue, apart from the fact mentioned above, one should regard another subtle point meticulously that educational system has been increasingly becoming more advanced. Children in the school are tough how to be responsible. Younger people learn different thing with different methods which can help them to enhance their mind. Therefore, by having such a complete mind, they will be able to make a right decision. Taking a personal experience as an example, back in the elementary school, I learned in the sociology class that every person should follow his/her interest in the course of study to be successful; then, when I wanted to choose my prospective major in the university, I did already know that I should choose ones that would satisfy my interest better.
Nonetheless, no one could neglect the fact that there is an obvious gap between parents and their children todays. The way of thinking has changed and parents grow up with an archaic system. For example, experience shows that most parents are not interested in technology and they have limited information about it. So if the children have problems with technology, their parents cannot help them. This makes a sense that children are willing to be more independent. But in the past the way of parent’s thinking were very close to their children, and they could provide more better information for kids.
In brief, with the development in many areas and changing the lifestyle, children are increasingly becoming more independent and self-governed. Even though this phenomenon would benefit the parents, since they would have more time to spend their favorite activates, but it will causes parents loss their control on their children which in turn might have unpredictable consequences for their kids. Taking all aforementioned arguments into account lead us to conclude that nor parents help and nor the technology are solely sufficient to have a promising future for the kids. And parent along the technology should accompany their children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
..., internet has facilitated accessing to a large number of information resources. People, especial...
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Line 2, column 256, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'bunches'?
Suggestion: bunches
...m to make a right decision. There are a bunch of movies and text on the net and child...
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Line 4, column 575, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... their children, and they could provide more better information for kids. In brief, with t...
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Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...d their favorite activates, but it will causes parents loss their control on their chi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, then, therefore, thus, apart from, as to, for example, in brief, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2979.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 576.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.171875 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80910235016 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482638888889 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 918.0 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.215464285 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.576923077 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223551923593 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698049671542 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456881006006 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136695839543 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470315421341 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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