Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, in all civilized societies, dependency of the children to their parents has engendered copious controversies among authorities. Nowadays, many people thinks that youth kids should separate their lives from their family. They think this approach makes the people more powerful to the problems that they might face in the future. On the other hand, other individuals believes that teenagers should always be under the shadow of their families. They say parents will take care of themselves throughout every bad situation that they cannot handle, so the teenagers should not be spoiled by the outside issues. Although, I firmly concur with the idea that dependency to the family is really not a good option for youth people. The following paragraphs will substantiate the most outstanding reasons.
First of all, Youth will become less dependence to their parents by separating their lives from them. To illustrate this fact, one needs to refer to Parents is not always by their side and they might be gone eventually. To demonstrate, most of the scientists all over the world contend that children cannot overcome on the life issues after the death of their parents, so they established an experimental program worldwide to estimate the isolation of the youth after the death of their parents. The results are surprising: even after years of the death of their families, over 90 percent of them were barely hold a successful achievement on their careers. As a result, the teenagers should separate their life from the parents for avoiding the isolation and related problems.
In approaching this issue, apart from the fact mentioned above, one should regard another subtle point meticulously that self-dependency will increase the ability of people to solve any problems that they face overtime. They will find a job soon. They can marry and obtain a successful life on the younger age. For instance, my friend part ways with his family when he was only fifteen. Although after seven years from that event, He has a decent job as a technician on a car company. He married when he was twenty and right now he has a beautiful baby and obviously a successful life.
All in all, separating life from parents has a vital role for survival and being successful nowadays. be an independent successful person not only will increase success on the career life but also will effect on self-dependency.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 609, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'held'.
Suggestion: held
...es, over 90 percent of them were barely hold a successful achievement on their caree...
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Line 4, column 102, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Be
...survival and being successful nowadays. be an independent successful person not on...
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Line 4, column 202, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...uccess on the career life but also will effect on self-dependency.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, apart from, for instance, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08312342569 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73581788097 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523929471033 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4745500215 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.9 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.85 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15621622017 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526534329744 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446173275924 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0921738134597 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623158230316 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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