Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Nowadays, people want to decide themselves for their lives such as type of their clothes, their favorite spouse, their life style, and so forth. Young people are majority of these kinds of persons. They want to decide independently about their life manner. While someone declares that were more independent in the past than they are today, I believe it is reverse. It goes without saying that young people living today are less dependent than ones lived in the past. In what follows, I will substantiate my perspective.
Firstly, young persons have more independence in choosing husband or wife than past. For instance, my brother got married thirty years ago. My father chose a girl from his uncle's family as a wife for my brother. On the other hand, my brother did not agree with him. But, he had to accept his father's decision, and finally, he got married with that girl. After that, a boy was their marriage result. Now, his boy two months ago got married with a girl from his university. My brother did not choose that girl, and my brother's boy and his classmate in the university had chosen each other for their future life. Thus, even though my brother was dependent in his marriage decision to his family, now, his boy is independent than his parents about his future life.
Secondly, in the past, young people had financial dependence to their parents while teenagers are self-sufficient now. For instance, my father always had taken money from his parents to start a new job. If he did not take any money from his parents, he could not start his favorite car. But, now, I have started a startup without any help from others. I got my prime investment from teaching in the private classes for students not working hard in the class. Therefore, children are more self-sufficient now than teenagers were in the past.
To conclude, while young persons are independent person to choose spouse now, they were completely dependent to their parents in choosing husband or wife. Moreover, young people are self-sufficient todays than ones were in the past.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84419263456 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54687297795 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487252124646 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7408914591 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.347826087 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.347826087 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218683279461 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739010100379 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675567031044 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161677708338 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066065694405 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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