Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
• Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, the world is quickly evolving, and this cause to develop in science and technology. So, there is a need to be up to date. Because of that, people should do new things being successful though it brings about risks. Therefore, successful people are taking risks to do new things instead of doing constant ones.
First of all, trying new things is exciting, and people could have exciting moments in their lives. When we experience new things, our life cannot be boring. For example, when I was in an undergraduate university, I had to see Mr. Asadi, who was the assistant professor at the university every morning and I was helping him to solve his computer problems. But, after few months I decided to go to an electronic laboratory and started designing Integrated Circuits (ICs) that it was exciting to work to do after few months that I was debugging the professor's computer, which was very dull to me and I could not do my duty well. So, it can be exciting to experience new works in life and prevent from tedious.
Secondly, doing new things can affect our learning and success. We can learn more about something new by doing them in our life span or a daily commute. For instance, I wanted to learn more about programming when I was a student at the university. So, I enrolled in the Python course that it was new to me, and after two months, I learned it very well. Now, I can do several projects on Python and have income from this way. Therefore, if people want to promote their knowledge and learning ability about something, they should try new things.
As a result, doing new works can bring about success. Not only is trying new things exciting, but it also causes learning and getting money from these new things. People can learn new things to achieve success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks doing'.
Suggestion: risks doing
...Therefore, successful people are taking risks to do new things instead of doing constant on...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 545, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
...ter few months that I was debugging the professors computer, which was very dull to me and...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62264150943 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52812978544 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528301886792 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.6189113496 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6666666667 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243900260564 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991858599172 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0960301252264 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18712551501 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707884635408 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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