Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for people to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, instead of staying in their home communities for their whole lives.
The transition to adulthood creates many opportunities. Among them one of the most important decisions a young person must make is that whether to stay in their hometown, closer to family, or to move away and live in a new place. From my own experience, I would definitely support the latter option, since it is difficult to grow as a person unless you see more of the world.
First, all the nations do not have that much settled economies to provide ample opportunities to justify employment purpose for the complete population. How can we ignore the fact that developed economies like America, China etc. provide job ventures not only in its native but for people throughout the world. The companies like Apple, Google, Microsoft etc. have the team-members from throughout the world that enhances their capability of growth and success. If we restrain ourselves to our home-town, we might not be able to enjoy the benefits that we can attain from other nations.
Secondly, in this technology and innovation prone world, we can't stay in isolation. we need interaction, communication and relationship with the people from all over the world so that they can enhance their knowledge by accumulating new facts, share their thought-process and resolve their doubts. No-one is proficient in every sector of his/her work under hand and needs guidance at times. To explore such place and have the benefit of the best available options one should adopt a global outlook by leaving behind conservative and outmoded outlook and adopting an international wider perspective.
In a nutshell, the adulthood is a very important time in a person's life, because it is a very crucial transition point and offers many benefits. To utilize our adulthood, we should move out of our home town and it will bring us the opportunity to learn another culture and increase career prospective.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 231, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Provide
...oped economies like America, China etc. provide job ventures not only in its native but...
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Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...chnology and innovation prone world, we cant stay in isolation. we need interaction,...
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Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...prone world, we cant stay in isolation. we need interaction, communication and rel...
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Line 4, column 60, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...adulthood is a very important time in a persons life, because it is a very crucial tran...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05825242718 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88713045263 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.63430420712 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2413729466 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.2 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175598366524 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473271582927 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601761445757 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930007417801 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328021290232 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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