Students at the university often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of both. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your preference.
Most of the students are worried when they decide to join college because they are leaving their comfort and family. When I received my housing packet and had to decide where to live, I was unsure where I would be happier at dorm or apartment. During my education first two years I lived in dorm and last two years in apartment. I got chance to experience both and I have lot of memories of both places. As per my experience, I enjoyed more living at the apartment compare to dorm.
Dorm provides various plus points but two of the most obvious are social contact and security. Living in a dorm is clearly the best way to start college life because we can make many friends. For example, at the beginning of my college, I made few friends from dorm who were my seniors. I was having really good time with them and they also helped me a lot for my studies. I might not have met them if I was living in the apartment. Another advantage of dorm is security. There is usually security desk and main lock door in addition to our room door lock. Dorm adviser live in dorm and keep site on the suspected people. Further, your roommate gets to know more about you. We get chance to share feeling and knowledge to each other. On other hand it does not give the privacy to the students.
Whereas, apartments give students privacy and freedom. Without dorm adviser to check that you are not having party or playing your music after a certain time of night, you can feel free to have little fun. Students have too much pressure of their education and they should have some fun in their life to get some relaxation. Moreover, students get freedom to choose their living place. Such as, which type of apartment they want to choose, near to campus or far, big in size or small, a cheap or expensive one, with roommates or without. In dorm students do not have these types of options to choose their dorm. In addition, privacy is major benefit students get in the apartment. Students do not get disturbance during their studies in the apartment. For example, I like to read till late night. In dorm I was not able to read late night because I was sharing room with other people. Whereas, in apartment I can study according to my schedules.
Let’s put in a nut shell, there is saying that “coin has two sides” same way living in dorm and apartment both has merits and demerits. Based on my experience, I enjoyed my education time in apartment because it gave freedom and privacy to me.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: big
... want to choose, near to campus or far, big in size or small, a cheap or expensive one, wit...
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Line 5, column 886, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e I was sharing room with other people. Whereas, in apartment I can study according to ...
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Line 7, column 260, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ause it gave freedom and privacy to me.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, so, whereas, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50772626932 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38511138966 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496688741722 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0023204992 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.4137931034 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6206896552 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96551724138 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253894202648 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701656218955 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626873188909 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167374481199 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631740982768 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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