Students at the university often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of both. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your preference.
Nowadays, the place of living plays a crucial role for students during their university studies. In addition, no one can deny that the place of living should be very convenient place, as well as place where the students will have the feeling of belonging. However, there has been a long-standing discussion whether students should live in an apartment or not. Opponents have the view that living in an apartment has too many downsides, while, advocates hold the opposite viewpoint. In this regard, I believe that the negative sides of living in apartment overweight the positive ones. In the following essay, I will elaborate both the disadvantages and advantages of living in an apartment, and vice versa.
The first point to be mentioned of living in apartment is the fact that students aren't distracted by others during their studies. According to me, this positive side is very crucial factor for students and it could affects positively on their grades. For instance, if students lived on their own than they wouldn't be distracted by their neighbours. As a consequence, through studying in silent and peaceful place, they would be more concentrated and motivated for studying. Personally, during my studies, after 3 years living in dormitories I decided to rent an apartment - the results was astonishing. In the last year of my studies I increase my GPA for 2 grades as a result of leaving and studying without being distracted by others.
On the other hand, there are also many downsides of living in an apartment. From my point of view, living in residence is to expensive. As a result, many students choose to live in dormitories. Moreover, students would be supposed to pay bills and other building's costs which is not a case of living in dormitory. Furthermore, students could become very introverted if they decide to live in an apartment. For example, students who live in dorms usually interact with their peers in a leisure time or during the parties, which are very frequent during the weekends. In addition, students who live in apartment usually don't have opportunity to interact with others , and that increase the level of depression, aggression and many other mental health problems. In contrast, living in dorms and sharing a dining room, entertainment room and other dorm facilities with hundred other people could boost our mood and
In weighing the pros and cons of place of living during the studies, I believe that living in an apartment could be more beneficial for students. I agree that students could be very isolated of the others during their residence in an apartment, but they could do many activities not related with the university which could make their life better. Going in cinema, making a party, attending at gymnasiym classes are only smart part of the things the students could do during their studies. As a result, through living in apartment they would have more freedom and concentration which is very important for them, especially during the exam period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2514.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0380761523 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77029801599 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464929859719 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8385635745 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.304347826 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6956521739 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52173913043 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366025864932 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136778521918 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658445828427 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253305267561 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774637266952 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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