TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c

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TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c

The professor discusses the rapid decline of small sea mammals among North America's west coast, and why it has been proved to be controversial. The information he presents is in direct contrast to the details outlined in the reading passage.

First, the lecturer denies the claim that the pollution is the main reason for the population decline. he explains that these small mammals are probably victim of larger predators. according to the professor, the larger predators kill the mammals and as a consequence to the death mammals' bodies wash up on the alaskan shore. In the contrary, the reading specify that the reason why these species have rapidly diminished is the fact that many pollution sources are found among the coast which indirectly result in the mammal's death.

Secondly, the speaker points out that orcas have changed their diets routines as a result of Wales extinction. In addition, the orcas started hunting other animals of prey such as small otters which are more frequently present among the alaskan coast. On the other hand, the reading makes it clear that the extinction of various small species indicates that pollution is the main factor of their rapid decline.

Finally, the professor discusses the uneven pattern of this decline, and he mentions that many large predators as orcas cannot reach the shallow and rocky places where the population of other small otters is drastically more dense. Nonetheless, according to the reading, the uneven pattern of concentration of pollutants is the major reason why the pollution is not present among all alaskan shore.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...main reason for the population decline. he explains that these small mammals are p...
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Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: According
...re probably victim of larger predators. according to the professor, the larger predators ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hy these species have rapidly diminished is the fact that many pollution sources ...
^^
Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mammals'' or 'mammal's'?
Suggestion: mammals'; mammal's
...he coast which indirectly result in the mammals death. Secondly, the speaker points ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1340.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 259.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17374517375 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57496828731 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513513513514 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5641890103 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.818181818 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5454545455 21.698381199 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5454545455 7.06452816374 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301370793845 0.272083759551 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108444105848 0.0996497079465 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640366712176 0.0662205650399 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177164063856 0.162205337803 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446752145618 0.0443174109184 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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