Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities
Since the dawn of the civilization, people has been trying to develop and improve their community. In addition, no one can deny the fact that our community is crucial and beneficial factor for our further existence. However, there has been a long-standing discussion whether youth care enough for their environment or not. Some people may hold the view that today's young generations spend to much time caring for the community, while, some others take the opposite viewpoint. Personally, I believe that today young people spend more time in improving their environment. In the following essay, I will elaborate on my standpoint through two reasonable pieces of evidence.
The first point to mentioned is that today youth, through using intelligent appliances, are more aware about the things that harm our society. In addition, people can be easily informed about air pollution or global warming today. For example, I have a friend who made a mobile application which measures air pollution's level in particular environment. Through using this application, many young people became aware about one of the majors problems in our society. In addition, since the application was made by my friend, many young people have been motivated to make intelligent appliance against many environmental problems. Furthermore, in order to improve our community, students, through using social media, have been organizing numerous protests for their rights. The convenient way of communication through the internet only in a matter of seconds, have made whole process for protest organisation much easier than it was in the past. As a result, the number of students involved in today's protests organisation drastically increased.
Another reason worth saying is the advantages of today's convenient and cheap flights. I believe that youth have more opportunities and chances to travel around the word today. Like a consequence, today's young people have chance to find about the newest modern inventions which can make out community more convenient. For instance, through travelling outside the country youth can realized how powerful and useful could be underground traffic. Stating reasons about the advantages from this type of traffic, the youth can make different efforts this beneficial traffic to come into force in their country. In addition, the air pollution, a traffic jam and a stressful life could be past for the future generations. Moreover, in other countries young people could be introduced to new cousin, music or way of living. All these unfamiliar things could be used as an example of new inventions. In that regard, youth could be more innovative than in tha past, and through opening new bars, restourants or hotels they could improve the economy in their country, as well as entertainment life.
To sum up briefly, one can deduce that today's young people spend more time helping their communities due to the rapid growth of technology and convenient, cheap flights. However, there are things to be said that will challenge the points I made in above paragraph. All in all, further research is needed to more accurately assess the merit of the points I argued.
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Suggestion: too
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in particular, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2674.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2741617357 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82115136011 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516765285996 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 823.5 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 4.94265232975 324% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6911874335 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.846153846 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57692307692 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184828758806 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539973271293 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710059391659 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134999707703 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646717272483 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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