It is generally accepted that it is unnecessary for an ordinary citizen to care about the events that have no relationship with his own life, and it is every individual's right to enjoy one's tranquility and serenity without being bothered by the secular world. However, I hold a different view that we, the human, as integrity, are obliged to care about each other, and hence it is of significant importance to know about events happening around the world.
Keeping your mind in sync with the worldwide news promises you a broadened horizon. Prospectives and methodologies vary from culture to culture. An American undoubtedly hold a different view from a Chinese when it comes to the greenhouse effects, and the difference in concepts leads to different political events. For instance, China imposes a strict tax on the chemical industry that never existed in the United States. Therefore, if you get a chance to know about worldwide events, you have opportunities to learn the ropes of both American and Chinese culture and broaden your horizon.
Even though a man is indifferent to broaden his horizon, it is still a necessity for him to concern the global affairs since the affairs will affect other's daily life. As a well-educated person who grows in a relatively developed area, you should know what others' concerns and make your effort to deal with them. Maybe a peace treaty between two countries which has been suffered from bloody war for 10 years has nothing to do with the hamburger of your breakfast. But it does influence the fates of millions of citizens of these countries. If you know that news, you get a chance to interact with your representatives, and therefore your deed might change the world dramatically.
To sum up, it is not a bonus but something fundamental for us to get know the events happening around the world even they have nothing to do with our daily life. Since it will give us chances to broaden our horizon, and it is our responsibility to take care of other human members.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... it is every individuals right to enjoy ones tranquility and serenity without being ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, you know, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86376811594 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79658927503 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550724637681 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3186276215 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.857142857 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343239577944 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103398311585 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959164739587 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199789141914 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598669685929 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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