Every parent will have lots of love towards there children and about there career. so this way parents should encourage there children to take some kind of part time jobs which they are interested in. In my opinion I strongly agree with the statement. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, when parents encourage children for part time jobs from that they will learn lot of things. From that jobs and they will come to know how the society is, what kind of creative work that society is liking in today world, by that they will get more ideas to establish. My experience is a compelling example for this, when I was 18 years old my parents gave me an idea to do some jobs which I like to do from that I can get some money for my higher education and for this I choose working as computer developer because I did computer courses in my College so, that will be helpful for my job career and I was going to job everyday and I use to enjoy my job, I was getting good salary by that I build up career in developing software today I am proud that I am a very good software developer in my company, because my parents gave an idea today I am in a good position.
Secondly, Teenagers should do part time job so that they can earn money and they will be more responsible for their money in that way they will be more conscious while speading money. For instance, I know one of my neighbor who’s parents are rich and they have a son who is twenty years old. He never know the value of money because his parents are rich enough they give money whenever he ask them.
So, he is enjoying now but once he go out of home and start doing job then only he is going to know the money value and he will be more conscious while spending it. In this way I concluded that every teenager should ought to do some part time jobs.. for this every parents should encourage their children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... there children and about there career. so this way parents should encourage there...
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...ildren for part time jobs from that they will learn lot of things. From that jobs...
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...or my job career and I was going to job everyday and I use to enjoy my job, I was gettin...
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...hould ought to do some part time jobs.. for this every parents should encourage the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to, for instance, i feel, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1558.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.23369565217 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20462008438 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453804347826 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 136.994363465 48.9658058833 280% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 119.846153846 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3076923077 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266568481709 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121239720037 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071136396401 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18343432951 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524149485371 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.55 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 86.8835125448 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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