Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Most parents are always wondering if they should let their teenage children work on a part-time job during school years or they should wait until graduation. In my opinion, I believe that working while studying would have more disadvantages than any potential advantages for young people. I feel this way for many reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, committing to an employment would affect the students' grades. The stress generated due to working would negatively impact our teenagers' mental health and they might lose the ability to focus on their education. As a result, their accomplishments in the classroom could suffer. In addition, the time spent at the workplace would cut on the time available for adolescents to study. Moreover, this stage in life is characterized by a lot of changes that occur in the body and mind. For instance, many physiological and hormonal changes happen during teenage years, which put the body under ongoing stress. Thus, advising our kids to get a job while at school might take the stress levels above healthy thresholds and these effect could be irreversible taking toll on the future career of our children since they would not be able to do well on their classes.
Secondly, it's better to concentrate on their courses and achieve the highest grades possible to guarantee a well-paying occupation in the future. Most companies nowadays prefer people with a degree in their field. Therefore, teenagers would only be able to get minimum-wage jobs that are mostly underpaying and time-consuming. For example, when I was in high school, I tried to get a job but since I did not have any qualifications, I was only able to get a job in a grocery store. I did not learn much in this position because I used to do very simple tasks, such as cleaning and organizing. Consequently, I quit after a couple of months to give enough time to school as my performance started to decline.
To sum up, I oppose the idea that teenagers should work a part-time job during high-school. This is mainly because this could adversely influence their academic achievements. Besides, staying home and doing their best to get accepted in better colleges would benefit them in the future
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97354497354 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84263537087 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1711326873 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9473684211 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8947368421 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2631578947 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197421771675 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056746387756 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359137441702 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126722234203 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184756002405 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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