“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.”
I must say it depends. As someone who has put a lot of his time in playing computer games i can't say people shouldn't be allowed to play them but nonetheless I understand how it can be bad for children if not controlled properly. I will elaborate on the benefits of video games first and then go on to point out some of the potential problems it can cause for children.
Most of the video games consist of mental challenges and are stimulating for the brain. And as a lot of studies have shown brain stimulation plays an important role in brain development especially in children. So I think video games can be a very good source of stimulation for children, presenting them with different kinds of mental challenges. Also there has been some research done on the effect of playing video games on children math solving and problem solving skills. The studies show increased problem solving skills in children who play video games daily for at least an hour when compared to children who don't play at all.
Although we can't dismiss the potential problems that video games can cause if left uncontrolled. Video games (because of them being highly stimulating) unusually have an addictive nature. A lot of children, especially those who have problems maintaining healthy relations with their peers may rely on video games for their sense of worth and self-confidence. Also video games are usually sedentary activities that don't require any physical movements which can contribute in the growth of obesity in young children. But the solution is not allowing children to play video games altogether. We should try to find new ways to control and direct children interactions with video games to make a safe and stimulating environment that can help them grow.
Based on the points discussed I believe we should not ban children from video games completely but they should be controlled regarding what games they are allowed to play and how much time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nonetheless, regarding, so, then, at least, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90936555891 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71039581437 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513595166163 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7213964784 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.333333333 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277841396599 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113828465194 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821771878132 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208666435794 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236047382376 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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