Do you agree or disagree with the following statements？ Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The live today is vastly different from it was before. Many areas in the world affected by the enormous changes that happened whether positively or negatively. Therefore, I adamantly disagree that because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well because the invention of sophisticated technology has a positive impact on generation’s achievement and life.
First of all, flourishing technology has a tremendous influence on people accomplishment. Indeed, it helps the community to become much productive. For instance, nowadays, it is readily to achieve two tasks in the same time. The student can efficiently study and working together because they can take online courses in the evening by using the internet and they can attend to the job in the morning. So they became more efficient and productive. Besides, they can improve their interpersonal skills while they are working by using and interacting with their relative by utilizing these innovations such as use many applications like facebook, whats up and viber. Hence, new entire generation can execute many different duties effectively than before.
Second, technical innovation has a profound effect on people education. In fact, the availability of this invention encourage the people to boost their knowledge even though they are busy. For instance, I am a mother of the child; he is four years old, I busy all the day taking care of him. However, the technology helps me to improve my knowledge acquisition. I could take any course or lesson that I need it online without the need to go to school because it is crucial for me to study and take care of my son at the same time. I realized that it became convenient to broaden your horizon while you are breeding your offspring. Therefore, people have an opportunity now to implement more than one duty at the same time.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, the invention of advanced technology encourages the community to improve their goals and education. Hopefully, all people appreciate these innovations.
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Essay evaluation report
The live today is vastly different from it was before.
The life today is vastly different to what it was before.
Many areas in the world affected by the enormous changes
Many areas in the world are affected by the enormous changes
can efficiently study and working together
can efficiently study and work together
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flaws:
some issues with the second reason/example. the topic is about 'whether people can do things well', not 'whether people can do things together'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 338 350
No. of Characters: 1697 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.288 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.021 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.832 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.789 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.523 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.281 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.453 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...e that because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well be...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 645, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...as use many applications like facebook, whats up and viber. Hence, new entire generat...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 706, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ence, new entire generation can execute many different duties effectively than before. Seco...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18343195266 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97454862087 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562130177515 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.3363894025 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2105263158 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7894736842 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252526619899 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603396591995 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0977469759786 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15018705284 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125460765399 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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