Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
With the rapid development of society, a great number of intelligent young elites are needed more than before, which requires a certain amount of money to support them. Thus, an interesting topic arises: to make a country’s development successful, whether a government should spend more money on young children or on undergraduates. While not a few people advocate the former idea, I cannot emphasize the necessity of the money spending on universities more for the following reasons.
First and foremost, more money should be spent on universities since young adults have more developed brain than younger kids. Their mature brain enables them to have a better memory and comprehension towards certain fields. Hence governments would be well-advised to show their emphasis on it as education is the basic foundation of individual’ success, and even a country’s success. It is not difficult to imagine how hopeful our country will be provided that a group of youngsters keep learning enthusiastically, make good use of their brain in the best of their age because of their confidence in their own governments. Nevertheless, it would be a totally tragedy if their superior advantage in brain has not been brought into full play due to the lack of money.
Another point worth mentioning is that youngsters are more creative in most fields, which calls for money to support their unique ideas go into action (/ become practical application.) . As is known to all, students in collage, have the most active mind compared with young children in primary school as well as most adults in their workplace. The Japanese government is a suitable case in point, for it keeps increasing its expenditure in universities on the ground that they believe youths in collage have the most creative mind and thus much money is required to meet the need of their experiments and so on. Thanks to this policy, several surveys suggests that the portion of Japanese international talent, whose country profited benefits from their contribution, is one of the largest over the world.
Admittedly, the education of children of five to ten years old is an important element when it comes to cultivate their intelligence and a positive approach to study. However, it is mostly from universities that the greatest thoughts and ideas come, which overweighs the necessity of money spending on young children.
To put it in a nutshell, university is a heaven for a mass of creative and perspective individuals to show their ability to bring benefits to their country’s progress. Therefore, it would not be overstated to claim that spending more money on university is worth it in the long run.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.176201373 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04663381026 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537757437071 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.8078098377 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.375 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3125 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276322832704 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100207980477 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705372403866 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175250812587 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892380298718 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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