Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are influenced more by their teachers than they are by their classmates.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As human beings, we are social animals. That's being said, our behaviors are susceptible to the people that surround us. During our youth, we spent most of our time in school. The people we interact with the most are teachers and our classmates instead of our family members. These people will affect and shape our personalities and the way we perform social activities. Comparing between teachers and classmates, it is my contention that classmates give more influences to the students to the teachers. Let me elaborate.
First of all, the students only interact with their teachers in a lecture. The time for a teacher to influence a student is normally no more than three hours a day. On the other hand, students not only stay with their classmates in the break time and after school but also they hang out together on the holidays. Even in class, students are able to interact with their classmates. We can easily find out that the time students spend with their classmates is far more longer than their teachers.
Secondly, students only met their teacher in a specific course. A student meets many different teachers a day, therefore the effectiveness of influence of the teacher is not that significant. At the other end of the spectrum, students form their social group among their classmates, and they would tempt to stay with the same group of people. Therefore, classmates definitely give more influences to the student.
Finally, people tempt to resist or escape from authorities. From the perspective of students, the teacher is a figure of authority. The teachers are not as close as their classmates, who are in the same level of the social hierarchy. Besides, the parents, being another figure of authority, usually ask their kids to obey their teachers. This unseen pressure may make the students keep a distance from the teacher and this is another reason that reduces the influences of the teachers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
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Message: Use only 'longer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: longer
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98447204969 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68773524724 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7046336164 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4285714286 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352928859454 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111292988433 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819110563956 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227069308093 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103655301955 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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