Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Subjects such as art, music, and drama should be a part of every child's basic education.
Use specific reasons and example to support your opinion.
Today, most parents would like to send their children to extra_curricular activities and they gain knowledge of painting, drawing, dancing, music, drama and e.g. during school time rather than they spending time with more learning basic education.
Obviously, I confirm that specific courses such as art, music or other materials relating to them should offer children and even college students in schools and universities. These material provide valuable and useful inputs for students in order to know and promote their knowledge about their own culture and importantly, flourish their talents or even may be as an entertainment and an amusement to them.
Firstly, these subject thoroughly (deeply) are educational for us. The culture of each country are mixed in art, music and so on. To obtain future awareness, everyone should usually learning some portion of them. For example, play a traditional music instrument can help for unity of family and also increases sense of loyalty to country. So learning a special art such as music is vital for every person and school time is good situation for acquisition of them.
furthermore, this courses can provide some opportunity for thrive children's inherent talents and school can play a successful role in this road. A vivid example that I remember clearly when I was studying in high school, I had some courses about Iranian's folkloric (traditional) music. In this course, all students learned so much both theoretical and practical about musical instruments like Setar which is peculiar (crucial-distinctive) to Iranian's local music. It is not possible for students to learn about them if school does not offer such kind of courses. Most importantly, one of students, his name is Amir, is now one of the best and the most prominent musician in the field of traditional. Hence, this courses can be benefit for progress inherent capacity.
Additionally, offering these items, along with other course, in the educational institutions not only bring us education but also can supply a happy atmosphere for children. For example, held a dancing class improve spirit of children and they have a nice moment with other students. Ultimately subjects such as art, music and so on will automatically affect behavior and manner of students.
To recapitulate briefly, I highly recommend that courses involving art, music, and drama should offer in schools, because taking part in classes certainly will increase knowledge of them about historical culture and change their behavior and provide them fun. Moreover, participants in classes get motivated to prosper themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, e.g., first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, for example, kind of, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32608695652 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86879655933 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56038647343 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4476421792 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.052631579 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7894736842 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57894736842 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154668394088 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513720665991 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396462645643 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850032716896 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195281485097 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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