Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In all the history of humankind, people never found the perfect formula to be successful. In this sense, a group of people decided to take risks and believe in their dreams despite the hard way. However, others preferred their comfort zone and did not try new projects. I firmly believe that the best way to be successful is trying different things and never give up in the process to achieve their dreams and not the other way. In spite of this topic call into question, I will explain two reasons in the following essay.
First and foremost, achieving the success in any field is one of the most important things in a person's life. That is mean that some people are always willing to struggle for their aims, goals, and dreams in spite of the way will be really hard and sometimes impossible. For instance, successful people in the history such as Bill Gates, Mandela, Mark Zuckerberg and so on try to demonstrate to us that the formula for being successful is the humility, be ready when the opportunity is near to us and take different risks using criterion. This idea is interest because for many is difficult to work hard in order to improve their skills and be resilient with all the difficulties and problems in the middle of the process of being successful.
Another important reason is that the unique way to be successful is being a person whom takes risks and tries something different such as new job, apply to an international master or Ph.D., invest in a new company and so on. It is important because this type of opportunity gives people a crucial knowledge that empowers them to be better next time. The process of trial and error give people an enormous knowledge for all their life. The recommendation is to make sure do not make the same mistake.
In sum, while some people prefer their comfort zone avoiding do new things different from their everyday activities, the rest of us states that if we want to be a successful person and professional, we must to work hard, bet for new opportunities, improve our knowledge and work with passion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...s one of the most important things in a persons life. That is mean that some people are...
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Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'crucial knowledge'.
Suggestion: crucial knowledge
...e this type of opportunity gives people a crucial knowledge that empowers them to be better next ti...
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Line 7, column 203, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
... successful person and professional, we must to work hard, bet for new opportunities, i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, really, so, while, for instance, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68956043956 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61655453333 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486263736264 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.2425076619 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.928571429 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169062676009 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613146662383 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391464663738 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11665063158 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178973300656 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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