It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

All the parents around the world always want the better for the raise of his children. Some of them prefer to raise their sons and daughters onto the slow and small countryside, others like me disagree with this idea, and we prefer to raise our children in the globalized environment of the big city for two strong reasons. First, the different education and health opportunities that only we found in the big city. Second, the multiculturality mindset and globalized vision of the citizens.

First and foremost, grow up in the countryside is very restricted for different reasons, one of the most important is a number of the opportunities in comparison with the big city in all the ways, especially in the education and health fields. That is because the big city has several schools and universities (with awarded professors) to our children and younger can attend. Likewise, we can find the best hospitals with recognized doctors that always can help our children in emergency cases. For instance, I born and grow up in a big city and I can choose the best option for my education and health.

Another point to consider relevant is the multiculturality mindset of the people who live in the big cities which is global than the countryside which is very close. This point is crucial because growing up in a place with a globalized vision where you can share with people from different parts of the worlds and cultures gives us a set of tools to improve their knowledge and mindset. For example, recent studies show that people who grow up in a big city are more likely to travel around the world, learn another language and struggle for working or study in another country searching better opportunities.

In sum, despite some people claims that the life in the countryside is much secured, slowed and comfortable, I firmly believe that bigger cities are the best place to raise our children and give them all the tools and opportunities for a better life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 510, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'bore'?
Suggestion: bore
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, likewise, second, so, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83679525223 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73871004595 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477744807122 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.2437204301 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.833333333 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0833333333 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217655861462 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854387753021 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043102746268 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132130648622 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256181703427 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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