Since the hunter-gathered times until our modern days, nature played a vital role in each individual's life. Today, some people prefer to be part of it and believe that living countryside is best to bring up a child. However, others take radically different point and live in big cities and take advantage of it. From my vantage point, I am with former group and the lines bellow will shed light on my viewpoint.
First of all, due to increasing urban population, big cities has become a dangerous place in terms of health condition. Air and noise pollution has skyrocketed compared to the last decades. Some researches demonstrate that kids who live in big cities have low resistance some illness. Moreover, the crime rates in urban cities are so high compared to the suburban. Even parents do not want to live in some big cities.
Secondly, in approaching the matter, apart from what mentioned above, there is another subtle point. I believe that kids should be part of nature, especially when they are in a stage acquiring new knowledge about our planet. Playing with animals teaches mercy and makes them better individual in their futures.
Finally, taking all aforementioned reasons into the account one cannot deny the importance of nature in the world of kids. Living in countryside is to kid's advantage since it save their health and makes them better person. The big cities is not good place to live for children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 91, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ays, nature played a vital role in each individuals life. Today, some people prefer to be p...
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Line 6, column 132, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'parted'?
Suggestion: parted
...le point. I believe that kids should be part of nature, especially when they are in ...
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Line 8, column 152, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'kid'.
Suggestion: kid
...ld of kids. Living in countryside is to kids advantage since it save their health an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, apart from, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1191.0 1977.66487455 60% => OK
No of words: 242.0 407.700716846 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92148760331 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61314224578 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.5524167245 48.9658058833 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.4 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1333333333 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101759982537 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0355941252555 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414029952725 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0623014252071 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413225234041 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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