Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different w

SINCE THE DAWN OF CIVILISATION EXPERIENCES PLAYED A SIGNIFICANT ROLE IN EACH PERSON'S LIFE IN EVERY ERA OF LIFE. EVEN THOUGH ACCORDING TO THE SOME PEOPLE, THE BEST WAY OF LEARNING LIFE IS FAMILY' ADVICES, I BELIEVE THAT PERSONAL EXPERIENCE IS THE BEST WAY OF LEARNING LIFE. THE LINES WILL SHED LIGHT MY VIEW POINT.

FIRST OF ALL, PERSONAL EXPERIENCES ARE SIGNIFICANT FOR PEOPLER FOR MYRIAD REASONS. EXPERIENCES ARE THE BEST TEACHERS SINCE THEY BOOST OUR KNOWLEGE. WE NOT ONLY GET LESSONS FROM OUR EXPERIENCES WHEN WE WON BUT ALSO WE LOST. ONE CAN NOT GET THESE EXPERIENCES FROM THE MEMBER OF FAMILY OR FRIEND'S ADVICES. EVEN THOUGH THEY WANT OUR FAVOUR, IT IS NOT THE BEST WAY TO LEARNING LIFE. ADVICES ALSO SHOWS OTHER'S EXPERIENCES.

SECONDLY, EXPERIENCES ARE VITAL FOR PEOPLE, BECAUSE THEY BOOST OUR CAPACITY. BY THE HELP OF THEM, I CAN INCREASE MY ORGANISATIONAL SKILL AND BURGEON ABILITIES . THESE SKILLS MIGHT WORKS TO MY ADVANTAGE IN BUSSINESS LIFE SINCE COMPANIES LOOKS FOR THE WORKER WHO SKILLED. ON THE CONTRARY, IF WE LISTEN THE OTHERS ADVICES RATHER THAN EXPERIENCED IT, WE MIGHT NOT LEARN THAT MUCH INFORMATION WHICH IS SIGNIFICANT US.

TO SUM UP, TAKING ALL AFOREMENTIONED REASONS ABOUT ONE CANNOT DENY THE IMPORTANCE OF EXPERIENCES. ONCE WE EXPERIENCED SOMETHING, WE LEARN BETTER AND BOOST OUR CAPACITY. BUT WE MIGHT NOT GET THESE CHANGE FROM OTHER'S EXPERIENCES.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “SINCE” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
SINCE THE DAWN OF CIVILISATION EXPERIENCES PL...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...GANISATIONAL SKILL AND BURGEON ABILITIES . THESE SKILLS MIGHT WORKS TO MY ADVANTAG...
^^
Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: To better; To well
...ONCE WE EXPERIENCED SOMETHING, WE LEARN BETTER AND BOOST OUR CAPACITY. BUT WE MIGHT NO...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1155.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 229.0 407.700716846 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04366812227 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81042146467 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 212.727598566 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563318777293 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 360.0 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6952653207 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.1875 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3125 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273936841373 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869373519973 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117039899588 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173285807468 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112318817038 0.0645574589148 174% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.36 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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