Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of humanity, success in life has played a significant role in people's life. No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that all people attempt to pave their way achieving their goals in different areas of the life. Not all people concur when this issue arises. Being cognizant to the logic behind those who repudiate or endorse the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that taking risks to do new affairs in new situations is better for people to gain success in comparison with doing the familiar thing. Among a plentitude of reasons in support of this assertion, Acquiring new experiences and finding new chances in this way could be picked out for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the importance of being experienced for booming in each area, based upon the statistics of different general questionnaire in sundry countries, people are unanimous about the conviction that most numbers of successful managers of big companies try different way and thing for gaining their aims; moreover, they face various difficulties and hardships and could pass them. This effort helps them to enhance their knowledge and be familiar with their abilities. Furthermore, even though they fail in their activity, the experience of this failure could obtain by them, and use them in other steps of their road toward the success. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. The result of the study carried out by Rice University's graduate students unveiled the fact that about 85 percent of famous managers of big companies in the U.S failed in the first tries but they did not become hopeless and continued to obtain their aims by using the experiences and knowledge gained in the past.
In addition to the reason raised above; the possibility of finding opportunities in doing new thing could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, new chances such as finding the novel idea or being familiar with some prestigious useful people are the merits of trying new affairs. For instance, last year, I search about the production of new polymer in my country which it helps our country being the independence of importing a large amount of this material. I was the new comer in this area but I was familiar with the big Chinese company for funding this activity by searching on the internet and it was an amazing chance for me. At last, we established the company and employed many jobless young people in my country and gain a lot of profit. This shows that walking in new ways might provide new chances for people. Taking impartial position to this topic, taking risks could waste most of our precious time without any gain; nevertheless, the palatable effect of these risks take precedence over its infinitesimal demerit.
Drawing upon the above reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that trying new ways and taking risk are more beneficial for being lucrative than be stuffy and do not the risk.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...mous managers of big companies in the U.S failed in the first tries but they did ...
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Message: Did you mean 'newcomer'?
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...arge amount of this material. I was the new comer in this area but I was familiar with th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, so, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2627.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 536.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90111940299 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66629935177 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542910447761 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 814.5 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.6539706377 48.9658058833 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.944444444 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7777777778 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216299231916 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711670474384 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573894548658 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147014447245 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348883595766 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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