Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Television for young children should be only means of entertainment. Parental controls are already in place for television. I choose to agree with the claim that Television advertising for young children should be banned. I feel this way for two mains reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, I feel the kids aged two to five usually watch television only for cartoons or animated movies. Nowadays there are options such as child lock and parental controls in the television. So most of the parents can avoid their children from watching certain age restricted channels and only allow content specific to kids. Example from my own house would be a compelling one. My Uncle and Aunt had applied parental controls on our television set, to ensure their kids does not come across unwanted content and their options limited to cartoons and educational content only. Moreover I feel the kids hardly are interest in other content except for games and cartoons.
Secondly, coming to advertisement, I think kids between two to five years would hardly interested in watching commercials or promotional content shown on television. What’s more important, the kids at such a young age would not be able to understand the advertisement. As even for their basic needs and choices they are dependent on their parents and can’t employ their own opinion.
In conclusion, I feel the commercials and promotional content targeted for kids should be banned. This is because children are more interested in watching cartoons and animation graphics and additionally children of that age would not be able to understand the advertisements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...cartoons and educational content only. Moreover I feel the kids hardly are interest in ...
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Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
...y. Moreover I feel the kids hardly are interest in other content except for games and c...
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'interest'
Suggestion: interest
... between two to five years would hardly interested in watching commercials or promotional ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, second, secondly, so, except for, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23134328358 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88639120302 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514925373134 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.746643245 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4666666667 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8666666667 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199747718372 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081184110671 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822641679707 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137264311176 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718372473544 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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