Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern world, celebrities and athletes are kind of leader of society because of their brilliant influence on people. they can easily change the culture, tech people to treat in correct route and prevent some problems for society. Hence, although most people believe that all of them are influenced by these popular people, In my view youths are more impressed by these famous individuals.
First and foremost, interesting of young people to these significant human beings is the first reason that I believe that youths are more impressed by celebrities. As matter of fact, youths need to decline to follow famous people and treat like them, because they consider those people as successful people of society. Indeed, the wealth, fame and another dramatically important features of success are inside of celebrities people. hence, youth believe that should they follow those methods of living. For example they try to wear like them, talk like them and some treatments that can make them special. For instance, I remember when I was in the high school, I used to cut my hair like my favorite actor, because I thought he is the best player in the cinema. I used to spend a lot of money to buy clothes that were like his clothes. Actually, the life style of these people persuade youth to treat like them.
Second, lacking of some experiences for young people is the reason why I think youth are impressed by famous people more than older ones. Youths have not enough experience, they accept all things that are beautiful because they do not have the perfect vision of life. Because of this reason, they readily persuade that these people are the best people of the world, and consider them as model of life style. For instance, when I was in the university, I used to take part in several challenges from celebrities without thinking the purpose of these challenge. Actually these challenges were ridiculous and fundamentally dangerous. I did them because I though these acts are impressing, because famous people had adviced them.
To wrap it up, young people are more influenced by celebrities, because they are interested to them more than older people and they do not have enough experiences.
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... I did them because I though these acts are impressing, because famous people had adviced them...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, hence, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1842.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95161290323 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54172033003 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470430107527 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1017883967 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.333333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192732528357 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693197411463 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633641882902 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152017513739 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530749376133 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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