The more money a person has, the more should give away to charities.
An undeniable fact of today world is importance of money. Earning money is a global concern, especially in the developed country, and one and all do their best to become rich. One of the most severe dilemmas that everyone face is whether the rich should allocate a large amount of their budget to the poor. Although at first glance it seems so humanitarian activity and many people appreciate this line of thought, I strongly do not agree to with what many people believe. I feel this way because of two reasons which would elaborate in following paragraphs.
To commence, one the most persuasive reasons is that, giving money as to a charity cannot solve the poverty problem in the society. What I mean is that, imagine there is a poor family and they are supported by a rich man who allocates a considerable amount of money monthly for this family. As a result, neither parent s parents who should manage that family nor children tries to change their situation. After a while they will get used to this situation and this circle including receiving money instead of working and earning money by the member of the poor family will be continued.
As equally as first reason which elaborated above is that, rich people have been working so hard to earning money so in this way they deserve to have more one. Take an example of one successful people in the world such as Dr. Nateqi. As much as I know and read his biography; this person has been trying hard since he was 10 years old. Although he had a trouble-childhood, he hasd never stop endeavor. He studied so hard and entered a high high-ranked university in our country, had never stop studying and as a result, he graduated with a high mark. After thirty years that he has been working night and day, now life is appealing to him and he is one the richest people in our community. It is not fair to donate his money on account of being rich. Nevertheless, the rich one can help the poor as much as possible and pave the way for them.
Nonetheless, this was a story in a nutshell. There are, however, some other examples and reasons, challenging the above statements, which are not mentioned. To put it briefly, based on the aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that not only the poverty should be solved deeply in society and not only donating donate money is not the best way, but also the poor themselves should change their situation and do not await others help.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, while, as to, i feel, i mean, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62903225806 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5853243047 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506912442396 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2807657603 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.45 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118781028473 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0326055587853 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334267532724 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691180687943 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182874375209 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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