do you agree or dissagree?
some parents believe that video games help students who are between 6-8 years old to study better in schools
Todays, people need to be accomplished to be able have competition with others. Through this route, knowledge has significant role. Hence, schools have brilliant impact on students to prepare them for future. Although most parents believe that video games help students to learn better, I think video games are not really effective because of following reasons.
First and foremost, wasting time is the first reason why I believe that these kinds of games are not efficient for students. As a matter of fact, gaming companies try to produce attractive and sweet games to be able have tremendous yield in this field of business, so most children are interested in these games and try to finish them as soon as possible to be able start new ones. However, teachers think would it help students during education, the fact is that it is kind of wasting time. Students would spend hours on playing with these games, and they will lose their best times for studying. For example, I remember when I was in elementary school, I spent most of the day on playing video games instead of studying for exams, so I could not get great grades on my exams, because I did not have enough study for my lessons. It shows that video games are not drastically helpful for young students.
Second, being tired is another exquisite point that I think video games are not good for education. Statistics show that students who spend a lot of time on playing video games are more tired than be able to focus on their education. These students use their brain for playing, and because of this reason their brain would be dramatically tired to be able focus on lessons. Indeed, their eyes and their minds will weak after couple of months, so they will not have any energy to keep studying in schools or home. For instance, my brother is six years old, and he used to play too much by computer. Every time that I wanted to work with him some mathematics, he was so tired because of playing games. Due to, he did not has any energy to study.
To wrap it up, I strongly believe that video games are not really efficient for students, because it cause students be so tired and it wastes their time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...that video games help students to learn better, I think video games are not really eff...
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Line 5, column 720, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...se of playing games. Due to, he did not has any energy to study. To wrap it up, ...
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Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
...ally efficient for students, because it cause students be so tired and it wastes thei...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64248704663 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35245714212 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487046632124 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.134149784 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5555555556 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217225119891 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753221500963 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694497338808 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152992842611 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391539974086 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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