Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history people especially young people spend many times to help other people. In all societies and communities young people have been pioneer of the assistant. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is whether young people nowadays do not devote enough time to helping their communities or not. Certainly if asked some people would agree with the statement that it is true and young people do not give enough time to helping other people while others would mention that the question depend on a great deal of factors; for example, somebody prefer to help just through giving money to poor people compared to other type of assistant. As far as I'm concerned, I adopt a firm position that all people particularly juveniles nowadays would like to spend their time to doing works that think are more necessary and significant rather than helping their communities. In what follows I will cogently pinpoint the most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
First of all, it's important to consider young people in these times actually devote many times of their life to internet and their virtual pages like on Instagram, Telegram, Facebook, etc. Certainly, if they want to help their communities, they will do it even through the same pages on internet. However, in most cases juveniles only spend their times in order to spend only without any aim, that is, they are involving with new technology or new context that absorb them without any attention to their environment even their families. To illustrate this idea let's consider the following example. I remember my friends, who was very active in charity activities in high school back in 2000 to 2003 before arising the computers and smartphones in my country, but now he spends or wastes 10 to 12 hours or so on internet and withdraws his charity activities.
Equally important point to be mentioned is that young people especially girls have very higher and greater requests and need. Indeed they believe their era is different and they must quickly reach everything that their parents caught them after a long run with hard working and great efforts. Therefore, young people in the present time are dealing with their wishes and requests and could not think and give enough time to other people. Of course, some young people exist that dispensable needs do not draw their attention and try to resolve other people' problems as well as their problems. However, it would be fair to say that for most juvenile it does not true and they only think themselves. The results of a recent study conducted in my country indicate that only 20 percent of all people who take part in charity activities are young people between 18 to 35.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I'm of the opinion that in most cases juveniles nowadays do not dedicate adequate time to helping their communities when they are spend huge times of their life on internet and they only think and worry about their needs and problems, too. All aforementioned reasons point to my idea. However, an important issue that must be mentioned is that this can not be said as an epidemic and some a counterexample might exist. Consequently, it is highly recommended that parents and schools or universities should put more emphasis on speaking about this story and instruct their young people about good results of helping other people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'somebody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prefers'.
Suggestion: prefers
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...end only without any aim, that is, they are involving with new technology or new context that...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...d withdraws his charity activities. Equally important point to be mentioned is that...
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Suggestion: Indeed,
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...helping their communities when they are spend huge times of their life on internet an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, for example, of course, speaking about, as well as, first of all, in most cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2848.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 576.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94444444444 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55652721564 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479166666667 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 867.6 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.9778282493 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.619047619 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4285714286 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52380952381 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335259851983 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107569119485 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795391668564 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223274855148 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0897503552884 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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