Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since decades ago, it has been always appreciated to help to improve the community that we belong to. Now, there is an assumption that young generations do not allocate enough time to be engaged with their communities, and this is a concept that I totally agree with. I feel this way for some reason, which I will explore in my essay.
The first reason that convinces me to support the assumption above is that the pace of life is too fast nowadays, and young people do not have enough time to be engaged with their community. They have to study hard to achieve the qualities that are necessary for their future career or to keep their job in the current competitive job market. They also need to work hard to be able in order to be able to pay their bills as life is too expensive today. Therefore, young people do not have enough time to communicate with their community. In fact, most of them may do not know any about their community. For example, it is almost one year that we moved to our new house. During this period of time, my wife and I had a chance to communicate to our community center and do some volunteering job there. On the contrary, my brothers, who are 25 and 27 years old, never engaged in these activities. Even though they do not know where our community center is located and which kind of facility it provides. They only go to study in their university or to work for their expenses.
The second reason is that youth are more alone these days because they are more satisfied with their computer, smartphone, and laptop. They have fewer friends and are careless about their surroundings. Apart from work and study, the only other activity that they do is computer gaming or searching in the virtual world. For instance, my brothers prefer to do computer game instead of going to do outdoor activities in their spare time. A big sports center with varieties of free sports facilities is located on the opposite side of my house, but they never used these community facilities. It seems that virtual world is more attractive for them. In fact, they only know their university, their workplace, and their virtual world, and they are not interested in being involved in public affairs.
In conclusion, I think young generation is more struggled with their job and with their virtual world, and many of them do not feel that they need to be engaged with their community. I think it is time to provide some kind of lessons or program in high schools to encourage youth to be involved in their community and try to improve it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 23, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has always been
Since decades ago, it has been always appreciated to help to improve the comm...
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Line 3, column 684, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... we moved to our new house. During this period of time, my wife and I had a chance to communic...
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Line 3, column 832, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ob there. On the contrary, my brothers, who are 25 and 27 years old, never engaged in t...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eir community and try to improve it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, apart from, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59299781182 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47370090465 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46170678337 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0768889111 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4090909091 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7727272727 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260550567294 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887587746818 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920979304537 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184640088158 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378192457747 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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