Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Throughout history, in all civilized societies, the issue of teenager's help to communities engenders copious controversies among people. Some people may hold the view that young people spend enough time to helping their comminities. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that they do not give sufficient time to helping their communities. As far as I am concerned, young people do not use their time to help their societies because not only are they bussy, but also the thechnology developes.
The first aspect to point out is that young people are very bussy. In this modern life every things around us changing and one of this is communities. To demonstrate, young people are attending universities and they try to increase their knowledges to make a better future for themself. They study very hard for their exam and participate in every class and work shop to enhance their knowledges to in our competing society, can find a job and make their own future. Therefore, this lead to a situation that they don not spent their time to help their society progress.
A further more subtle point is that the technology advances. Nowadays, the advancement of technology are happening in a very fast pace and many new thing discover. To illustrate, company of game produce many computer game and each day they enhance their quality and this make them very attractive to teenagers. For instance, a computer game stimulate a very believable scene for players. A person who plays this games get really addictive to this game and spend all his time to play this game. Also, many program exist in the market that are appealing to young people because they can talk to their friend every time that want.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned argument, due to the bussiness and development in the technology young people do not give enough time to helping their communities. Consequently, it is highly recommended that think a way for young people make them to spend time to their communities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 500, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun program seems to be countable; consider using: 'many programs'.
Suggestion: many programs
...d all his time to play this game. Also, many program exist in the market that are appealing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93567251462 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73899050978 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511695906433 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7811494706 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2941176471 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1176470588 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313309161777 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11502204176 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108379072027 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23600228775 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12977488773 0.0645574589148 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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