Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Living in large cities, people should overcome several problems related to their personal life and their environment. Therefore, the question whether young people nowadyas give enough time to helping their communities or not, has long been a topic of controversy. On the one hand, there are people who adhere to the belief considering the difficulty which people have in their life nowadyas, they are helping their communities more than the past; on the other hand, others believe that people do not have enough time to help their communities nowadays. As far as I am personally concerned, the latter carries further weight since not only are people very busy with personal life nowadyas but also have the communities been grown and complicated than the past.

People's lives are more complicated than past due to population increase. In fact, people need to devote all their time to overcome their problems encountered in their personal lives such as finding a job, buying a house, financial problems and so one. For instance, people who lived in the past could easily obtain a job to manage their family members and fulfil their expectations. While nowadays, people should go through a strong competition in order to find a decent job even if they have graduated from university specialized in one field. Furthermore, as long as the cities grow, people need to overcome different problems regarding their personal life. For example, parents need to control their children more so as to be certain that their children are raising in appropriate way. Subsequently, people cannot help their community nowadays unless they sacrifice their personal life.

Communities need more help from people since they are becoming more complex. As long as a community thrive, its problems become more severe. For instance, there are more cars in the street than the past, as a result of which there is more traffic jam and air pollution nowadyas. Then, people should devote more time to overcome such communal problems while they are involved with their personal problems. Moreover, people nowadyas expect that government should help the community since they think that they are not able to help a comunity with such complicated issues. Also, they think the government have the tools which are necessary to help a community. Consequently, provided the communities become larger than today, people will give less helping than today.

To wrap it up, people cannot help their communities until not only do they have a personal life without any serious problems but also do the community keep samll in size. Therefore, if I were in power, I do not allow the cities become larger than thier current size.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
... life and their environment. Therefore, the question whether young people nowadyas give enough time ...
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Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: AND_SO_ONE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'and so on' (="etc.")?
Suggestion: and so on
...job, buying a house, financial problems and so one. For instance, people who lived in the ...
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Line 3, column 718, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...nts need to control their children more so as to be certain that their children are rais...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12045454545 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5783978224 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459090909091 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2615596719 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.65 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.65 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209839905513 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794434513804 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570080828193 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152579631699 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406732616478 0.0645574589148 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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