Some claim that young men or women should choose a job that is similar to what their parents did. This argument seems reasonable. However, I disagree with this statement for the following reasons.
Admittedly, it is true that haveing a job similar to a parent's contributes to family harmony. This is because the elder can share the occupational experiences and resources with the young and thereby gradually the whole family will think alike. However, young people will suffer from pressure from their family since parents may interfere with their children's work. Specifically, if parents know everything about job that the young hold, they will frequently comment on the performance of the yound and suggest to them what to do.
On the other hand, young men who work at occupations different from their parents show higher devotion in education, which is good for the advancement of a culture and technology as well as for the economic development of the whole country. To be specific, in order to compete with those who rely on family connection to be employed, they must learn more knowledge and skills. For instance, in the bank where my mother works, 75% of the employees who obtained the job independently have master's degrees, compared with 25% who were recommended by parents. Yet the highly-educated young staff tend to be promoted more quickly according to their well job performance, though they almost did not benefit from assistance from the parents.
In addition, those who work at a job different from their parents are more independent and competitive. This is because lacking the so-called help from parents, young people are able to be fully engaged in what they really like doing without the interference of parents. According to a survery, among TOP 500 richest Chinese people, over two thirds work in the fields unrelated to that of their parents. So the more independent from the help of parents, the more competitive young people could be in their future vocation.
Needless to say, although work choice similar to that o parents seems appealing, I strongly agree with the statement that taking on a different and independent career benefits both the young people and the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 54, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a parent' or simply 'parents'?
Suggestion: a parent; parents
...t is true that haveing a job similar to a parents contributes to family harmony. This is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, really, so, third, well, as for, for instance, in addition, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08791208791 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73926310742 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524725274725 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9627270262 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.75 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326647856251 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113370228728 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0979495448466 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216887828239 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115328324146 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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