Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Everyday there are countless decisions made, some trivial while some significant. When it comes who can affect the important decisions which impose profound influence on our society in the future, some people claim that it is definitely not the young people. However, as far as I am concerned, young people enjoy the power to make world-changing decisions. In the following paragraphs I will present my reasons for holding this opinion.
To begin with, young people can influence essential policy made by the government. They can take an active part in advocating their opinions and voting against the unjust and non-scientific policies. By doing so, they can influence the government's policy making and thus affect the future of our society. For example, homosexual marriage has been banned in many countries for a long time and a large amount of people consider homosexuality as a disease or even sin. China was one of such countries. Nevertheless, with the enduring efforts of people, among which mostly are young, more and more Chinese are accepting same sex love as individual preference an as normal as the affection between man and woman. And I am confident that the policy will change in favor of gay marriage since the view of the citizen is changing. As we can see, what young people today do can indeed affect decisions regarding important aspects of the society in the future.
Moreover, the consumption behavior of young people are shaping a new economic picture of our society. Since young people tend to consume more and have the power to influence the consumption habits of their parents, the elder generation, their impact on the development of commercial forms are significant. Providers will have adapt to the likes and dislikes of trends among young people to prospect. For instance, young people in China enjoy the convenience of paying via cell phone and are accustomed to this channel. What's more, they gradually persuade and teach their parents to do the same. As a result, there is almost no shop, restaurant, cinema or any other consuming places which cannot receive payment through cell phone. This totally changed the economic phenomenon in China, where the majority of shops only accept cash a decade ago.
As discussed above, concerning the topic of young people's power of influencing important decisions in the society, I can safely come to the conclusion that they are able to do so, at least in terms of policy and economy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
Everyday there are countless decisions made, som...
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Line 2, column 236, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...es. By doing so, they can influence the governments policy making and thus affect the futur...
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Line 3, column 327, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'adapted'.
Suggestion: adapted
...ms are significant. Providers will have adapt to the likes and dislikes of trends amo...
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Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...one and are accustomed to this channel. Whats more, they gradually persuade and teach...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, so, thus, while, at least, for example, for instance, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02941176471 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70616206994 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561274509804 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9479926587 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222285895477 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652289107195 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551994171921 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141920126851 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145438933278 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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