In modern society, traveling is not only a relaxation but also a opportunity to connect a wider world. Many people benefit from traveling abroad and highly recommend it to everyone. The issue regarding travel abroad has never failed to arouse concerns among individuals and at the same time provoke a hot debate about whether people should visit various countries at early age. Some are inclined to be strong believers in the claim that it is better to travel abroad when you are older. Attractive and sound as they seems, this argument can not bear closer analysis. Accordingly, I, without hesitation, advocate that people should travel abroad when they are young. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will elaborate on in the following passage.
First of all, no one can deny that traveling is an eye-opening activity, especially when people travel to different countries, they are exposed to totally different cultures and people. This experience is beneficial for young people to broaden their horizons and step out of their comfor zones. For example, when I was in high school, I have the chance to visit an American school. This trip opened a new world for me. I am still grateful for this experience today. In contrast, for people who are older, their mindset are mainly fixed and are less inclined to try new things. Obviously, they can hardly benefit from this activity.
Second, world is becoming more and more connected than before. Thus, if people can visit various countries as soon as they can, it will have positive effect on their future careers. To be clear, when visiting other countries, you can have a better grasp of their culture and have some basic information about this land. After you first enter the workplace, unlike other people who only focus on the domestic market, it is easier for you to develop a global sight. This ability will serve you as a major edge, which will make you become more competative in the company. Probably a job promotion in a foreseeable future if you can use all the information wisely.
Considering all the arguments and examples given above, we can safely say that people should travel aboad when they are young due to the possible benefit to open their mind and their careers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...eling is not only a relaxation but also a opportunity to connect a wider world. M...
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Line 1, column 517, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...are older. Attractive and sound as they seems, this argument can not bear closer anal...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, still, thus, for example, i feel, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86945169713 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47913667618 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543080939948 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4934248426 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8095238095 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2380952381 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268294270598 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793508302263 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857687030917 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159386694718 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846175249918 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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