Do you agree or disagree? It is more enjoyable to have a job when you only work three days a week for long hours than to have a job when you work five days a week for shorter hours
Working is an important part of life for almost each person. It is a key and major activity of each day. Some people think it is more beneficial to have a longer working hours job for three days a week than have a shorter working hours job for five days a week. Others disagree. In my opinion,working a shorter time each day for five days a week provides more advantages for two reasons.
First, working longer hours each day for less days a week makes everything unpleasant during your free time. The time incoherence between you and the other people makes your personal and social activities really difficult. For example, one year ago, as a shift technician in a chemical plant, I was working 12 hours each day for three days a week. On my working day, I left the company at 8:30 pm when all the restaurant near my home were closed and I had to go to a far food-court to eat. Unfortunately, I needed to return home by feet because it was so late that there was not any public transportation at all. Besides, during my days off, it was difficult to hang out with my friends while they were working. This experience thought me that working loner hours for a shorter time each week is too bad for you to enjoy your free time.
Second, having an office-hour job helps you maintain the balance between your work and life. Difficult tasks of one week become easier when they are divided evenly into five days rather than three days. Working five days a week brings you less pressure from work and more energy to personal interests. For instance, one of my friends who works in a computer network company lives a more balanced life than me. She usually finishes her work at 4:30 pm from Monday to Friday. Therefore, she has plenty energy and time to enjoy personal activities after work, such as eating a hot pot, going shopping and even taking online courses. On weekend, she has two days to go hiking and swimming. Her personal interests were well developed because of the balanced time between work and life. In contrast, it would be hard to imagine that someone, who works longer hours a day, to enjoy such a colorful life.
In sum, working longer time each day for three days a week would be a disaster for anyone. He would suffer from the inconvenience of personal activities and the low energy for hobbies. To avoid these bad effects, we must keep ourselves away from this working schedule.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 293, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , working
...s a week. Others disagree. In my opinion,working a shorter time each day for five days a...
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Line 3, column 42, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun days is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...irst, working longer hours each day for less days a week makes everything unpleasant...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5625 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44546025295 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488425925926 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8694545386 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6956521739 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7826086957 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47826086957 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.503137960243 0.236089414692 213% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151205754364 0.076458572812 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13924170765 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.344135991672 0.150856017488 228% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108999987026 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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