Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good?
In human’s history, we take endless endeavor to step forward. Many people may think progress is essential part for human being. But we can also see progress affect something badly. So, I don’t agree the state that progress is always good.
First of all, development of technology is the biggest factor that relate with environment pollution. Operating factories, using fossil fuels, and driving vehicles are harmful for nature. For specific, nowadays, improving efficiency of fishing gear is one of the main reason for depleting fish resource. Because of strong power of the catching tools, it is easier to catch lots of fishes than before. So, many vessels catch too many fish recently. In other words, amount of catch of marine species beyond the fish’s ability of replenish and it makes decline of fish stock. That is why many people want to reinforce the regulation of fishery sectors for sustainable yield of fish.
Secondly, invention of social network service as know as SNS makes people less care about real relationship. Currently we can see a lots of people only watch their smart phones to care about their online relationship even they sit with their friends. Recently, I went a coffee shop near my university with my high school friend. Few hour later, I realized that we rarely talked each other and only watched smartphone to watch our SNS. I thought if we only wanted to see online relationship, we were not supposed to meet each other. We had taken more conversation with each other and we should asked more about our real friend in front of us. I think people should focus on our reality friend, not cyber anonymous.
To sum up, we always need to consider about pros and cons of progress. Progress is not always good definitely. Because progress always have advantage and disadvantage. Invention of new material would cause a critical reason for destruction of environment and relatively broad boundaries of relationship among people than past make us can’t concentrate on real friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...real relationship. Currently we can see a lots of people only watch their smart phones...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, i think, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05970149254 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69857350335 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611940298507 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.549977106 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0454545455 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2272727273 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116336403724 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05609832487 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115693052627 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107506127253 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107536052917 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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