In this era when the development of society has become a considerable concern for many, whether the rapid growth of cities impact society positively becomes a salient issue. I firmly disagree that the rapid growth of cities has mostly a positive impact on the development of society.
First, the rapid growth of cities contributes more to the rapid growth of population, which has some negative impacts on the development of society. Since the population is fast expanding, it brings on some harsh phenomena like traffic congestion, reduction of resources, and decreasing happiness. For example, my cousin graduated from Shanghai College last year, and she could not afford the high price of a single house, so she had to rent a primitive apartment in the suburb. It is no surprising that she had to get up at 5 am and drive almost 3 hours to make it in time for work because of the terrible traffic congestion. After finishing work, it would be about 10 pm when reaches home. If cities had not had rapid growths, resulting in competition for limited resources, people like my cousin would not be so exhausted. Clearly, the rapid growth of cities is not mostly positive for society.
In addition, the air condition decreases hastily because with the rapid growth of cities, the number of private cars also increases, thus engendering pollution. For instance, in metropolises like Beijing, with numerous automobiles and factories emitting large amounts of carbon dioxide, sulfur dioxide, or nitrogen monoxide into the atmosphere, haze has become a frequent problem, causing serious illnesses. In fact, a survey conducted by Peking University shows that metropolitan people who suffer from lung illness increased 33% in the last 5 years, and over 10,000 people die because of lung cancer caused by PM 2.5. If the growth of cities is more gradual, air condition could be preserved, and a more positive impact would be felt by society.
To some extent, rapid growth of cities does provide more employment and improves economy. However, it simultaneously accelerates immigration from rural areas to urban areas, and investment in rural areas would decrease, making this area somewhat deserted. Therefore, the rapid growth of cities cannot be concluded as mostly affecting society positively.
To conclude, I disagree that the rapid growth of cities affects society mostly in a positive manner.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'not' or 'now'?
Suggestion: not; now
...rimitive apartment in the suburb. It is no surprising that she had to get up at 5 ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s is not mostly positive for society. In addition, the air condition decreases...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive manner" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...growth of cities affects society mostly in a positive manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20618556701 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79848370609 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533505154639 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.7480980534 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.25 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354642601014 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159276862297 0.076458572812 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17725491121 0.0737576698707 240% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245718373995 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112436758956 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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