Do you agree or disagree with the statement: Governments have done enough to educate the people the importance of a balanced lifestyle and healthy eating.
Accompanied with development of society, people, nowadays, have greatly changed their ways of living. Unlike humdrum, platitudinous days in past, they enjoy their life as much as possible, such as bungee jumping, tasting delicious food all over the world, or even a travel in space. Ironically, these activities might overdo and harm their body. Someone may argue that government have done a lot to educate people to live healthy, however, there are still numerous things authority needs to do.
First of all, millions of people, who have received tips, slogan, or warnings from the government, are having hazardous lifestyle. Lots of them simply stay up night to play games, enjoying junk food and doing little exercise. Obviously, officials emphasize the significance of healthy life to encourage people to be energetic and live long, these citizens give it miss. My friend John, a college student, will be a compelling example to this. When he came to university, he had learnt kinds of advice to have a health lifestyle in campus, which were suggested by officials from the school and local government, nevertheless, he spent his days playing computer games, eating fried chicken and never doing exercise. Thus, he is suffering several diseases from those behaviors. If he had paid attention to tips and his lifestyle seriously, he would have a wonderful physical condition now.
Second, some external atmospheres have not be regulated by government. Although government persuade people to have a lifestyle which benefits body, a number of supervisions have to be set up. When people are meandering in parks in the city, smog, with sulfur dioxide, PM2.5 or ever nicotine, makes people feel breathless and harms people’s circulation system, which will be an irreversible damage for health. It is no regulations that are responsible for charging supervisions.
Indeed, the government has done a lot to guide the public have a better lifestyle, however, it just did something essential, not determinative. So, the authority needs to promulgate the advantages of the lifestyle in all aspects of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...ing. Unlike humdrum, platitudinous days in past, they enjoy their life as much as possi...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'travel'.
Suggestion: travel
...icious food all over the world, or even a travel in space. Ironically, these activities ...
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Line 1, column 466, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'things'' or 'thing's'?
Suggestion: things'; thing's
...lthy, however, there are still numerous things authority needs to do. First of all,...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'misses'?
Suggestion: misses
...c and live long, these citizens give it miss. My friend John, a college student, wil...
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Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ond, some external atmospheres have not be regulated by government. Although gover...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'irreversible damage'.
Suggestion: irreversible damage
...ple’s circulation system, which will be an irreversible damage for health. It is no regulations that a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, still, thus, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28571428571 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89344497261 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645833333333 0.524837075471 123% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2851120709 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.470588235 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225842288298 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623551008577 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589848394923 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129710240736 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178460971526 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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