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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than getting advice from friends your same age.

Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than getting advice from friends your same age.

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With the technology advancement and economy booming up, our society has been through great changes that people in different age may have totally different experience, while your pioneers share the same feeling with you. No wonder some claim that suggestions from older friends seem to be less effective. So people in our generation begin to ignore the advice from the elderly. However, as a young person. I still believe that older people’s words are so valuable and helpful that we could never turn a deaf ear to.

First of all, when you have older friends in your grandparents’ age, their experience can guide you. Life used to be much tougher than now, but our grandparents have overcome all the difficulties and create a bright future for their children, which attest to their intelligence and strong willpower. So they are not, as some suggested, a burden on society or of little value, but instead they are the most excellent people full of wisdoms. My grandfather, who served in the army which liberated our country, taught me the importance of patriotism. And I learned how to calculate before school with the help of my grandmother, a professor who used to study in Soviet Union. With the colorful experience and wisdoms of our grandparents, their advice is a treasure for the young.

Moreover, the old generation can remind us of the virtues and traditions we have lost in this busy and materialistic society. Nowadays our highly developed economy and technology makes some luxuries available for normal people. However, our economy is facing the overcapacity of production, which brings several financial crises. Many people have to face the financial loss while they are not able to get rid of the extravagance, resulting in the overpressure of making ends meet. Some of them even make money with immoral methods. In this situation, our older friends who still live an economical life keep the old good virtues. So their advices can lead you out of the abnormal lifestyle.

In addition, older friends also include people who are just slightly elder than you, such as your elder brothers. Although they have less experience than the old generation, they possess the knowledge that suits you best. When I was facing the college entrance examination, one of the most important test during my life, I tended to my graduated cousin, who had already pass the exam and entered Fudan University, for advice. He was not as knowledgeable as my teacher, but he knew exactly what I needed for the exam. With his help, I got a good grade and enter the Xiamen University, which is my goal. Friends who are little older than you can provide you with practical advice.

To sum it all, it is obvious that getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than getting advice from friends your same age.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 588, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...on, our older friends who still live an economical life keep the old good virtues. So thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, in addition, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9248434238 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71866467056 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538622129436 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9046278239 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.36 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.16 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37867915233 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10206795254 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157146144374 0.0737576698707 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284679802528 0.150856017488 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.24142354535 0.0645574589148 374% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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