Do you agree or disagree with this statement? successful people try new thing and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.use reasons and examples to support your answer.
Success is the most important part of our lives because it has a lot of good results for us like confidence in the personality's state and welfare in the life's state. some people beleive that if they want to success, they should be familiar with the process that they will face with. some disagrees. In my view, people should try new things and take risks with high ratio for progress for two reasons.
First, risks in life are good opportunities that never will happen again and these opportunities give us a lot of benefits like promotion in our job's state. For example, my husband, Nader, is an IT man.he always needs to be upgraded related to his job. When he was very young, he did not have enough money to travel Turkey to get some certifications from Microsoft company but he worked a lot and accepted the risk; he spent all his money and tooke those certifications. Five months later, he promoted in his job,in Iran and his salary expanded by nine hundred dollars. This story taugth me to be valian and take risks in my life drasticly.
Second,risks help us to be more successful in life quality because I have seen that It causes to earn a lot of money, in many cases like my father's occasion. I remember when I was entering the university and my dad needed a lot of money to pay for the university he took an unbeleivable risk. He desided to investigate all his money on a big and risky project for a factory. If he lost every thing I never could study in the university. After all, he earned all the factory's quotas and got the manager of that. He is that rich that I can study untill doctorate with out any concern about poverty.
As a result, I always try to take risks till one day some thing happen like my dad's one for me.
In sum, we need to take risks in our life for success because it gives us promotion and progress. We should advise this issue to every single young person, if we hope they get happy in their lifes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, after all, for example, as a result, in many cases, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39889196676 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43963972548 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548476454294 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7861861419 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4117647059 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2352941176 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129756649508 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046493603104 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484386171097 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891036556196 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048726473096 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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