Do you agree or disagree with the statement that television advertisements affect young children's behavior? Please include reasons and examples in your answer.
Advertisement influence on children
Today in the fast-growing technological world, businesses are using various media to grow and advertise their products. However, I believe that advertisements influence children in numerous ways. Children want to buy every product they like even though they do not have much understanding that which one is better for them. Also, commercial in media affects the eating habits of kids; further, it provides exposure to risky stunts to children.
First, companies use advertisements to increase their sales. They introduce the product in the commercial as attractive and interesting, so kids want to buy the product. Children around the world spend billions of dollars buying products which they do not even like, just because of the advertisement introduce product exciting. I would like to give an example from my personal life experience; I have a son, who asks for a robot car even though he is not a big fan of robots. One day he saw an advertisement about it, and he got excited to buy that toy. I bought that robot car for him, and he did not even play with it for a week before he got bored. That money was all got wasted on the expensive toy.
Second, nowadays, childhood obesity is becoming a huge problem because it brings various diseases with it. Advertisements for food play an important role in developing unhealthy habits among kids. It is causing a serious issue for parents, who are trying to develop good eating habits for their children. For example, I like to cook healthy food at home every day, however, my kids demand soda and pizza for dinner because they are surrounded by all the junk food commercials. Children are not mentally mature enough to make decisions about good or bad choices, especially involving their food choices. In this type of situation, it becomes difficult for the parents to stop them from making the wrong choices.
Lastly, as I mentioned earlier, commercials on media involve stunts and they do not educate about not performing that stunt at home. I believe that sometimes it can put some kid’s life in danger. For instance, one day my son and his friend were playing, and his friend told him that he saw an advertisement on television that after drinking energy drinks he can become a strong man. Also, he can jump from a height without getting hurt. Thankfully, their teacher got on time and he stopped them before anyone got hurt.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that advertisements should be banned on children’s television shows. It certainly influences them in a bad way. Children buy unnecessary products, develop unhealthy eating habits, also, they attempt dangerous stunt.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99776286353 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81201557556 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534675615213 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8322613651 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.36 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.88 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115102034439 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357731957376 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346684209953 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0886545616933 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469640290157 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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