do you agree or disagree? young people now days dont give enough time to helping their community. +toefl essay
In the modern society, junior citizenships are make important part of society. They have crucial rule for improve and assist of their community. Whether or not in this age juniors spend proper time and energy for having better community and support their citizens is controversial. I believe that young people pay out suitable time for society because of two reasons: first, they are spending time for studding and secondly, they can help another people.
As began with, most people who have range age between 18 until 30 years' old consume sufficient duration for improve their society. Since young people spend most time for studding and searching, they can help to improve their society. Therefore, when students who are spending most time in university, they are not only learning new science but also trying solve some problem which they find in the society with doing special project. To shed light on the affirmation discussion, we can assume master students at university. Major duty of master student is doing special project which it is considered major problem and issue. Hence, they have obligation work to problem 2 or 3 years in order to find scientific and operational solution. They must study carefully, search accurate and examine advertent to find advantage solution.
Secondly, young citizenships have many ways to help their society such as helping another people. If young humans assist another people like poor citizenry, they would improve humanitarian sense in community. Furthermore, owing to helping penniless, junior citizenships can increase indigence in their city where they live. Also, aid to poor people not only means give them amount of currency but also means free education. To illustrate what was mentioned further, some young people who are teaching in school go to reigns which these areas are underprivileged and teach to the children without give money from them. Therefore, this young people give enough time to improve their society. In addition to, some young doctors cure poor people without give any price from them so that they can improve health of citizens.
All things considered, in this era I believe that youth persons provide abundant times for aid their society. They have many ways to assist fore improve and better citizen. One of them is at university, they are trying solve important crucial issues of their society. Another way is, they can help poor people in many ways like afford to free education and cure. All of these ways are done by young people who spend enough time for their society.
- TPO 21 78
- TOEFL TPO 24 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- TPO-29:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO 27 80
- TPO 18 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
... improve and assist of their community. Whether or not in this age juniors spend proper time a...
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Line 3, column 591, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
...nt is doing special project which it is consider major problem and issue. Hence, they ha...
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Line 5, column 485, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...as mentioned further, some young people who are teachers go to reigns which these areas...
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Line 7, column 336, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to free'
Suggestion: to free
...lp poor people in many ways like afford free education and cure. All of this ways ar...
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Line 7, column 368, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... afford free education and cure. All of this ways are done by young people who spend...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13942307692 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47689022912 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497596153846 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9225445949 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9565217391 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0869565217 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13043478261 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222438303787 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803150280072 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735673205036 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154842625889 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557163652799 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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