Do you agree that people should always participate in the activities that they are good at or talented in?
Self-actualization is one of the controversial issues nowadays because competition plays a crucial role in the modern era. People strive to flourish their talents in the competitive world and try to be perfect in aspects of life, such as education and career. Two main ideas related to this topic are the opposite; Some people believe that versatility is the essential factor for being a winner, and people have to be adapted to various situations, not only the fields which are related to them. On the contrary, some others believe that people must discover their talent and move forward in one area, which is the most convenient for them. I support the idea that flourishing talent is the most crucial solution and vindicate my viewpoint for two reasons.
The first crucial reason is that people inherit most of the abilities and intelligence from their biological parents, and the genetics effect is inevitable in determining one’s aptitudes. In a research conducted by Tehran University, nearly 80 percent of the students studying in engineering fields had at least one member in their family who majored in engineering or mathematical sciences. The environmental factors, however, can either exacerbate or consolidate the genetics effect and cannot take its place unless with an indefatigable endeavor that ordinary people rarely have in the society. So flourishing talents and being distinguished as a top candidate in job interviews requires natural abilities, and endeavor is a secondary factor in such an issue.
The other noteworthy reason that should not be underestimated is that, usually, endeavoring fields that are not inclined to one’s talents causes depression and anxiety. University students who suffer depression and disorders are those who have not chosen their major according to their abilities. Usually, they can not meet the expectations that society or parents require. Students in high school should be careful about their future and not get deceived by the majors that are more popular in the community. Because they have to try hard, and an ideal job is not guaranteed for them. So because of their self-confidence, they should choose the best major according to their talents.
To make the whole discussion concise, talent plays an essential role in life and career since genetics is dominant in comparison to environmental factors and the essentiality of self-confidence and equilibrium in life. Following abilities is highly recommended for an experience with glorious achievements, and these achievements can make one ambitious for other goals.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, at least, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37100737101 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05272445316 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523341523342 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.394427538 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.588235294 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9411764706 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88235294118 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120539343081 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419832384291 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0261068774141 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0693751552984 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309135746856 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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