Celebrities and their deeds are very important to society. They are symbols of other individuals' personalities in the view of foreign societies. Some people think celebrities are more important to younger people rather than they are to older individuals, others disagree. In my opinion, the concentrations of younger people on celebrities are more than the older ones for two main reasons.
In the beginning, we have to consider one point that youngers know more about celebrities' lives. When you know more about the private lives of famous people and their accomplishments, their valuable deeds are more important to you. For example, my little brother goes to charities every week and tries to help poor people. I asked him to say something about this change in his personality and he told me " Decaprio goes to charities every day so I go too". Maybe it's weird, but I don't know Decaprio at all, I haven't heard his name even. However, these kinds of deeds are so beneficial and if I knew him maybe I would accompany my brother. Hence, famous individuals are more important to youngs rather than us.
Second, the youngers are inclined to imitate someone and who's better than a celebrity for them? The TV or radio are always talking about celebrities, so they have more chances to be symbols for people, also, youngers are prone to select them as their heroes. For instance, my little sister acts like Adele, furthermore, she makes up exactly like Adele too. On the other hand, my mother knows Adele even more than my sister, My mother is a loyal fan of Adele. Even so, my mother is an advocate of Adele and buys every Adele's song and my sister doesn't spend even one dollar for Adele, but in my family, just my sister tries to imitate her personality, makeup and so on.
In conclusion, when you are young, celebrities are very important to you, as you age it will be diminished Because You don't want to imitate anyone and even you don't know most of celebrities. We have to concern about our children since perhaps they are following an improper celebrity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, so, even so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, talking about, you know, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76880222841 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63780800133 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532033426184 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2812351142 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1111111111 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9444444444 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38888888889 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254462956978 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885393760426 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846823891373 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168970135904 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590614782181 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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