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Do you think that opinion of celebrities, famous entertainer and athletes are more important on young people than they are on older people.?

Essay topics: Do you think that opinion of celebrities, famous entertainer and athletes are more important on young people than they are on older people.?

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This topic asked whether or not the notions of celebrities, famous entertainers and athletes are crucial to youngster than elderly people. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with this statement due to they have voluminous impact only young individuals, while others would mention that question depends on a great deal of factors, for instance, someone may hold the view that importance of their ideas is tantamount for everyone compared to previous sentiment. As far as I am concerned, I adopt a firm position that their views do have greater influence and importance on young people than older people.

The first reason coming to mind substantiating my stand point is concerned with this issue that aims and capabilities that younger people possess. People at early ages are always looking for right path toward bright future. Famous people play such an important role in their decision. The best example that fit this notion is my own experience. Years ago, I was so despaired regarding my future, most of the time, I was considering what to do, how is the life going to be for me so on, till I saw the renowned scholar on t.v show, who was giving the lecture about how to be organized and planned individual to succeed in the future. He is the only one who brought me to be an industrious manager at one of the reputable company in my country. It goes without saying that, principally, youngsters are inclined toward adoption of notions from famed individuals who might lead them to be successful.

Another vital reason which deserves some word here is that weakness of younger individuals associated with prominent people. It is important to consider that we may hardly observe elderly people who are dying to see or watch them. A vivid example can be given to shed light on the subject is my own younger brother. He is big fan of Hussein Bold. Whenever he sees him on t.v, on billboard at the road side begins to show extreme emotions. Last week, Hussein Bold was seen on t.v advertisement, which was introduction of a new nike shoe, engendered him to try to persuade my father to buy until late midnight. Without a shadow of doubt, I have never witnessed an old person in that kind of manner in my life.

Having considered all the aforementioned grounds discussed above, I am of the opinion that it is crystal clear that ideas of famous people are highly effective as well as critically influential on youngsters than elderly people. Therefore, there is no doubt that I disagree about significance on older ones.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
This topic asked whether or not the notions of celebrities, famous ente...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, may, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, kind of, no doubt, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82339449541 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73358607798 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587155963303 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.2622745624 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.684210526 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9473684211 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213354475183 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599259335326 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081913107997 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138120280866 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102187207269 0.0645574589148 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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