In this modern age, we have access to different forms of technology. Cell phone and other technologies now available, was like a dream beforehand. Although these technologies have provided us with lots of advantages, they have some side effects too. Some people strongly hold the opinion that children of previous generation were more diligent and hardworking because they didn't have access to the Internet. They also believe that the Internet is the source of laziness in the present generation, and prevents them from working hard for their education and studies. Although the Internet might have had some side effect, but in my opinion it's advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Now, in the following article I try to vindicate my standpoint.
First, I believe by having access to the Internet, we can educate children much easier. Nowadays there are online courses and students in faraway places without appropriate teachers can benefit good teachers of other places. Therefore, it's crystal clear that technology has not only made education a more arduous task, but also facilitated having access to proper education. For instance, in my university I see that there are different students from different parts of our country coming to study. My close friend is from a small town, and she says even though she didn't have great teachers in high school, and sometimes they didn't have even a teacher specialized in a course, but she had access to good teachers and other facilities from the Internet like free books helping her be successful in the entrance exam of universities.
Moreover, I suppose applications on mobile phone or laptop and tablet play a major role to teach little children different things. Children like to work with them and there are diverse beneficial applications available, such as the app for teaching another language. I have a cousin who is four years old, and whenever I see her, she is hanging around with some body's mobile phone. She just by herself and with the assistance of these applications has learned some English words and can count up to 50 which is a great breakthrough for such a young age.
To make the long story short, I believe highly in modern technologies, such as cell phone, social networking Web sites and etc. as a great breakthrough that has revolutionized our life. Every new thing might have some disadvantages, yet it's our responsibility to use them correctly. In field of education also it has double-side effects, thus we should be careful about them. To count some of the benefits, students from different part of the world don't have to be worried about enough materials provided by their teachers in schools, as there are lots of resources on the Internet. In addition, appealing applications on tablets for example, can be very constructive not only for young-aged kids but also for others. And these were only two of the huge benefits we can have from modern technologies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: etc.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i suppose, in addition, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2454.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02868852459 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82259843862 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518442622951 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0421858284 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.695652174 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2173913043 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47826086957 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101578175578 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335524557903 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427487426824 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0633577710294 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199754358805 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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