Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
The answer to this question can be varied from person to person. In my opinion, by emerging of the technology, children's education is becoming much more difficult. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, by emerging cell phone, video games, and social network, students spend a great deal of their time on them instead of studying. Actually, gaming is highly addictive because they are constantly given rewards, new records, and a new level, all of which engage their mind, which most of the time they forget to do their homework. Hence, their homework is sacrificed by a few more hours playing the video games. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better, When I was a high-school student, my father bought me a video-game, which as a result of my excellent grade in that year. Subsequently, I spent most of my time playing vide-gam that always forgot to do my assignment. That year was very important for me because I had an entrance exam for university. Finally, by spending my time on a video-game, I could not accept in a high-ranked university. For this reason, when I think that year, I would be so upset. Accordingly, the rapid growth of technology brought a lot of games waste students' time.
Secondly, nowadays, students have engaged mentally and physically in the technology and spend less time on their education. In fact, they are always thinking about video-game and social network. By spending a lot of time on a social network, the could find much more friends and spend their time with them. For example, when I was an undergraduate student, I had a part-time job at university campus magazine as a reporter. As I remember, one time, I interviewed professor Nejati, who is a well-known psychologist in my country. He told me that a large number of parents every day come to my office in order to learn how to behave with their children. Because, due to making friends in a social network, their children meet with a stranger and they are concern about this issue. Also, he told me that they are not serious about their education. For this reason, the more they spend their time in the social network, the less they have time to study.
In conclusion, no one can deny the enormous effect of technology on children's education. Not only do they sacrifice their assignment to spend on the tools of technology. but also they make friendship with stranger
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, finally, hence, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77304964539 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75106008165 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501182033097 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8532389297 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.125 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267298801928 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806239043129 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725359097607 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149226728249 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598968188733 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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