Children's education has always been one of the worries of parents and society because it affects the children and also community's future. Some people believe that educating children has become more difficult today because of new technological tools that are available to them such as cell phones and online games. Others disagree. In my view, those technological tools doesn't make educating harder for children, for two reasons.
First, children have always played game in the history and nowadays just the kind of the game they play has changed. They never liked to go to school instead of playing and it is so today. For example, when I was a child, I used to play with my friends all the time. After school, always my mother had the trouble of making me do my homework before I go out and start to play with my classmates. She had the same problem with my younger brother whom is 10 years younger than me. He usually didn't went out to play with his classmates but instead they played online games with each other in the home. So as you can see, the new technological hobbies doesn't bring new problem for children's education.
Second, children become more ready to learn school material as they use these new staff. They have better background information today, because they learn a lot through using cell phones, playing online games and using social networks. For example, when I went to school for the first time about 22 years ago, I could only count to 10 and I had no idea of big numbers such as a million or so. But last year when my cousin went to first grade school, she knew the numbers very well. Actually, she had learned that from playing a specific kind of video game. That's why I believe new technological tools even make children's education easier.
In sum, I think that new technological tools doesn't make children's education harder compared with the past because children have always liked to play instead of going to school and these new playing staff provides educational material for them. So it's better to think about how to best use the technology instead of blaming everything on it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, so, well, for example, i think, kind of, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72972972973 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42291833043 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516216216216 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3547348649 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2222222222 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185334026944 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642690483569 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608363438614 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130505862705 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513624043817 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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